Òóðíèðíîå õàéêó íîìåð 3
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catpadÈññà, êàê è áûëî ñêàçàíî.
Îðèãèíàë
さむしろや
鍋にすじか
天の川
Samushiro ya
Nabe ni sujikau
Ama-no-gawa
Ïåðåâîä ñëîâ
ya - ñì. íîìåð 2.
nabe - ãîðøîê. Ðàíüøå, íàâåðíîå, ïðîñòî áûë ãîðøîê, à òåïåðü ñïåöèàëüíûé òàêîé ãîðøîê ñ ãîðåëêîé. Íè îäíà âå÷åðèíêà íå îáõîäèòñÿ áåç òîãî, ÷òîáû òóäà íå ñâàëèëè â êó÷ó âñÿêèõ ðàêîâ è ïîòîì âàðèëè âåñü âå÷åð ïðÿìî íà ñòîëå (èç îïûòà).
ni - â. Ò.å. «â ãîðøêå» - ïðåäëîãè èäóò ïîñëå ñóùåñòâèòåëüíûõ.
ama-no-kawa - Ìëå÷íûé ïóòü.
Ïåðåâîä íåñêîëüêèõ ñëîâ íàéòè íå óäàëîñü ïîýòîìó äàþ àíãëèéñêèé ïåðåâîä Áëàéñà:
A straw-mat;
The Milky Way aslant
In the saucepan.
À âîò åãî êîììåíòàðèé, êîòîðûé ìíå íðàâèòñÿ äàæå áîëüøå, ÷åì ñàìî õàéêó:
The greatness of Issa consists in his putting the Galaxy into the stew-pot.
Äî ïîíåäåëüíèêà !
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Haiku 2, 3
Date: 2002-02-02 10:50 pm (UTC)Áëèçèòñÿ îñåíü.
Ñåðäöó ñòàíîâèòñÿ äîì
Ìèëåé è ðîäíåé.
Haiku 3
 ãîðøêå ñî ñóïîì
 ðàçäóìüÿõ ñîçåðöàþ
ß ìëå÷íûé ïóòü...
Orengi
Re: Haiku 2, 3
Date: 2002-02-03 06:54 am (UTC)Âû ïîìåñòèëè ïåðåâîä òðåòüåãî õàéêó ïîïåðåä áàòüêà.
Kàê ãîâîðèë Øâàðöåíåããåð, "Big mistake!"
Ðåêîìåíäóþ Âàì, ïîêà íå ïîçäíî, èçìåíèòü â íåì íåñêîëüêî áóêîâîê:
Íà ãîðøêå
 ðàçäóìüÿõ ñîçåðöàþ
ß ìëå÷íûé ïóòü...
Ïèíêó
Re: Haiku 2, 3
Date: 2002-02-03 11:20 pm (UTC)Ïðîøó ïðîùåíèÿ. Âïðåäü "ïîïåðåä áàòüêà" ïîïûòàþñü íè÷åãî íå âûñòàâëÿòü! À íàñ÷åò ãîðøêîâ... - êîìó êàê âèäèòñÿ :)).
Âàø(à) Orengi
Äîðîã(îé!) Îðåíãè!
Date: 2002-02-04 12:18 am (UTC)Â÷åðà ãíóñíûå òèïû äîñòàëè ìåíÿ íåïðèëè÷íûìè ïðåäëîæåíèÿìè.
×òî è ïîâëèÿëî(ëà).
Âàø Ïèíêó
no subject
Date: 2002-02-04 12:21 am (UTC)à ÷òî - ýòîò ãîðøîê ñòîèò íà óëèöå? ïî÷åìó â íåì íåáî îòðàæàåòñÿ? èëè ýòî ñòèõ ïóòåøåñòâåííèêà?
ß íå Ìèøà, íî îòâå÷ó
Date: 2002-02-04 01:26 am (UTC)åñòü ñïåöèàëüíûå ïðèñòðîéêè áåç êðûøè.
 òåïëîå âðåìÿ ãîäà òàì ìîëÿòñÿ, à çèìîé ýòè êîìíàòû èñïîëüçóþòñÿ äëÿ
îáðÿäà õàðàêèðè. Ïî âñåé âèäèìîñòè, Èññà ïèñàë ñâîå ñòèõîòâîðåíèå
â ãîñòÿõ ó çíàòíîãî ïîêðîâèòåëÿ.
Ïðîèñõîäèëî ýòî çèìîé èëè ëåòîì - ïîêà íåïîíÿòíî.
Ïèíêó
Re: Äîðîã(îé!) Îðåíãè!
Date: 2002-02-04 11:29 pm (UTC)Òàê è áûòü - ïðîùàþ :)). Óñïåõà â êîíêóðñå!
Îrengi