Òóðíèðíîå õàéêó íîìåð 4 (something special)

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Ýòî õàéêó ÿ óæå êàê-òî ïðèâîäèë. Ïðèøëî âðåìÿ äàòü åãî äëÿ ïåðåâîäà. Ïîíèìàþ, ÷òî áóäåò òÿæåëî, íî óæàñíî èíòåðåñíî, ÷òî ïîëó÷èòñÿ.

Èññà.

Îðèãèíàë

Shoben no
tara-tara shita ya
kakitsubata

Ïåðåâîä ñëîâ

shoben - ìî÷à
no - ñóôôèêñ ïðèíàäëåæíîñòè, ò.å. "òàðà-òàðà ìî÷è"
tara-tara - çâóêîïîäðàæàíèå (êàï-êàï).
shita - âíèçó, ïîä
ya - ñì. íîìåð 2.
kakitsubata - öâåòû èðèñà.

Ïåðåâîä Áëàéñà:

Just below the pissing,
Drip, drip, drip, -
Iris flowers !

Êîììåíòàðèé Áëàéñà:

This is one of the best haiku ever written. It has everything in it. It overflows, overflowers.

Comments

Òà-äà-äà-äàì!

[gianthare.livejournal.com]

Ïîñëå êîíñóëüòàöèé ñî ñëîâàð¸ì è catpadîì ïîÿâëÿåòñÿ äîëãîæäàííûé ÿïîíñêèé îðèãèíàë:

小便の
たらたら下や
杜若

×åñòü ìíå è õâàëà!

Re: Òà-äà-äà-äàì!

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Честь и хвала Гигантскому Зайцу !
Пусть уж остаётся здесь, как памятник.

Re: Òà-äà-äà-äàì!

[(Anonymous)]

×èòàåì ó ïðåäñåäàòåëÿ:
Åñëè gianthareñìîæåò - áóäåò åìó ïî÷¸ò.

Ïî÷¸ò Âàì, óâàæàåìûé, à ñîâñåì íå òî, ÷òî Âû íàïèñàëè!

Íå çðÿ ÿ âñ¸-òàêè -
Ïåäàíò